From the online news story about “Jackie Chan Brings Water to Drought Areas”, on May, 20 in this year, we can see that Jackie Chan has really done a great charity event to the vulnerable groups in the drought stricken area. We can deeply touched by the short article about the fact of charity.
Primarily, people who are interested in paying attention to such online news about the stars who are highed on doing charity will be attracted easily by the famous public person through the big distinct title. The title has clearly showed the content of the news, telling us the character and the place where it happened. Another characteristic is that the first paragraph has been narrated in black body way, as a quotation, in order to indicate the topic of the news and draw readers to keep on reading the following reports.
After reading the whole news, the first thing I am aware of is the length. It is much shorter than other articles, which can make readers read it more patiently. And the news of about 250words simply and clearly speaks the truth of Jackie Chan’s charity activity. We can go through quickly to know what the information the news brings to us.
This story has quoting several sections from Jackie Chan’s blog, which is directly and authentically described some details of the story. It not only shows the respect to the protagonist in this charity activity, but also provides a more clearly way to make readers understood.
Nevertheless, the writing method of quoting seems a little lazy. Lack of details about the activity is the disadvantage of the news. People have to know more information and see photos from Jackie Chan’s blog through the link, even though the link is evidently showed in the end and gives access to the blog. In another way, the link is a good publicity for readers to know more about Jackie Chan, no more than the charity events.
As to the structure, there are six paragraphs running through the article. It is a pity that the structure is not good and clear-cut. As we all know, a bright layer of structure is absolutely necessary in an article.
In general, this news is a good one. As it has its own attractive power and regular readers, but its weaknesses are obvious, such as the unsharp structure and lack of details and pictures.
All in all, this is the review on the online news story, which is showed in the website: http://www.looktothestars.org/news/4436-jackie-chan-brings-water-to-drought-areas
I like that stars or rich persons donate and invest themselves into charity. It is almost compulsory! I don't know if you heard about the huge donation M. Schumacher made for the damages of Tsunami few years ago? I think it was millions!
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